Topic: IELTS writing 59 : 38 Read the task WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about
the following topic: Some people argue that all experimentation
on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others
believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from
animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be
justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your
answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words. Write
your answer Type your answer here words 0/500
Overall Band Score:
7
Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
Strive to incorporate even richer and more precise language.
Grammar Mistakes:
0
Vocabulary Repetition:
failure: 6
success: 3
should: 3
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Original Corrected
It goes without saying that failure is It goes without saying that failure is
often perceived as something negative. often perceived as something negative.
However, what many fail to realize is However, what many fail to realize is
that setbacks are a crucial part of self- that setbacks are a crucial part of self-
improvement. As Albert Einstein once improvement. As Albert Einstein once
said, "Failure is success in progress." said, "Failure is success in progress."
Every mistake we make is an Every mistake we make is an
opportunity to refine our skills, develop opportunity to refine our skills, develop
resilience, and move one step closer to resilience, and move one step closer to
our goals. our goals.
Rethinking Failure: A Stepping Stone to Rethinking Failure: A Stepping Stone to
Growth Growth
Contrary to popular belief, failure should Contrary to popular belief, failure should
not be seen as a sign of incompetence not be seen as a sign of incompetence
but rather as a natural part of the but rather as a natural part of the
learning process. The road to success is learning process. The road to success is
rarely straightforward, and challenges rarely straightforward, and challenges
serve as invaluable lessons rather than serve as invaluable lessons rather than
obstacles. Instead of being discouraged obstacles. Instead of being discouraged
by failure, we should analyze what went by failure, we should analyze what went
wrong and use it as a foundation for wrong and use it as a foundation for
future achievements. future achievements.
Lessons Learned: Strength Through Lessons Learned: Strength Through
Adversity Adversity
Failure pushes us to reflect on our Failure pushes us to reflect on our
weaknesses and motivates us to weaknesses and motivates us to
improve. A personal example of this is improve. A personal example of this is
my experience with acrobatic elements. my experience with acrobatic elements.
At first, certain movements seemed At first, certain movements seemed
impossible, and despite numerous impossible, and despite numerous
attempts, I kept failing. However, attempts, I kept failing. However,
instead of giving up, I carefully instead of giving up, I carefully
examined my mistakes, adjusted my examined my mistakes, adjusted my
technique, and dedicated more time to technique, and dedicated more time to
training. Eventually, I mastered the training. Eventually, I mastered the
moves that once seemed beyond my moves that once seemed beyond my
reach. This experience taught me that reach. This experience taught me that
persistence and self-discipline are key persistence and self-discipline are key
to overcoming challenges. to overcoming challenges.
A Catalyst for Success: Embracing A Catalyst for Success: Embracing
Second Chances Second Chances
History has shown that those who History has shown that those who
achieve greatness often fail multiple achieve greatness often fail multiple
times before succeeding. Thomas times before succeeding. Thomas
Edison, for instance, famously Edison, for instance, famously
conducted over a thousand failed conducted over a thousand failed
experiments before inventing the light experiments before inventing the light
bulb. What set him apart was his bulb. What set him apart was his
determination to keep going. Failure determination to keep going. Failure
does not define us; how we respond to it does not define us; how we respond to it
does. does.
Conclusion Conclusion
All things considered, failure should be All things considered, failure should be
seen not as a defeat but as an essential seen not as a defeat but as an essential
part of personal growth. It allows us to part of personal growth. It allows us to
develop resilience, gain insight into our develop resilience, gain insight into our
mistakes, and refine our goals. The mistakes, and refine our goals. The
ability to embrace failure and learn from ability to embrace failure and learn from
it is what ultimately leads to success. it is what ultimately leads to success.
Word Count: 319 Word Count: 319
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Task Response Coherence & Lexical Resource Grammatical
Cohesion Range &
Accuracy
1 9 8 9
The essay is The essay is well- The essay The grammar is
completely off- organized and demonstrates a virtually error-free,
topic. It addresses coherent, with a good range of showing a wide
the topic of failure clear introduction, vocabulary, used range of structures
and success, not body paragraphs, accurately and used with precision
animal and conclusion. appropriately. and control.
experimentation. The flow of ideas There is some
is smooth and sophistication in
easy to follow. word choice.
