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Peer Review Feedback Form

Reviewer Group: ___________________Author


_____ Group: _________________________

Course Code: _____________________ Date: ________________

Name of the reviewer:


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4) Amir
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Title of the Essay:


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Content and Organization

1. Does the first paragraph include a thesis statement? _____ Yes _____ No

Underline the thesis statement. Do you have a clear picture of where the paper is
going from the thesis?

Comments:

There is a thesis statement, however it is not quite clear as the thesis statement has faulty parallelism

2. Does the first paragraph also include a preview of the points the paper will use to
support the thesis statement?

Comments:
No, they did not put the preview point in the first paragraph, which was mention in the
Thesis statement “equal parenting roles”
3. Underline the topic sentence for each paragraph. Do these topic sentences clearly
link back to the thesis statement and preview of main points in the first paragraph?
What suggestions do you have for the structure—the order of the main points as
shown by the topic sentences?

Compliment: The topic sentences have good supporting details and concrete evidence.

Suggestion: The first topic sentence and third topic sentence do not exactly link back to their thesis
statement. We suggest to change the first topic sentence so that it relates to their first main point in
the thesis statement.

Correction: topic sentence: the first reason men should get paternity leave is to allow the parents to have
Equal parenting roles.

Second topic sentence: The topic sentence is clear and leads back to the thesis statement. However,
I suggest the writer to use more transition words. For example, adding the word “moreover”, before stating
Third paragraph: there is a clear thesis statement and good supporting details with research.

There is no counter arguement for the subject.


4. Review each paragraph. Does each paragraph include specific, concrete examples
from the readings, lectures, and videos, and do those examples both support the topic
sentence and advance the thesis statement?

Comments and suggestions:

Yes they provided concrete examples

5. Read the concluding paragraph. Does it summarize the main points and link back to
the thesis statement?

Comments and suggestions:

Supporting details are good. However,it is not in the right format.

1. Rephrase thesis statement first


2. Relate back to the rest of the essay.
3 topic sentence need to be generalised and ask a question for readers to ponder.

Questions about Style and Writing Conventions (grammar, punctuation, etc.)

6. Is the writing style appropriate for you—the audience? The paper should be
interesting to read, provide necessary background, and be written at an appropriate
level for a college student to read.

Comments and suggestions:

Yes the paragraph is very interesting and informative for college students to read. By reading this i have also gain
this we have gained new perspective on this topic.

7. Do you see any problems with grammar, punctuation, spelling, or any other writing
conventions? The paper should be written in standard formal English. Mark these
issues on the paper itself and discuss suggestions with the writer.

Little grammar mistakes. However, it is not in the right format.

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