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FlashFiction Peer Edit Sheet

The document provides a peer-editing worksheet for a flash fiction story. It includes questions about the story's hook, narrative perspective, setting details, characterization of the main character Luke Sawyer, conflicts, dialogue, plot structure, writing style, and use of vivid language. Feedback is provided on each element, finding the story starts engagingly, features well-developed characters and realistic conflicts, advances the plot through natural dialogue, and uses descriptive language that shows rather than just tells.

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FlashFiction Peer Edit Sheet

The document provides a peer-editing worksheet for a flash fiction story. It includes questions about the story's hook, narrative perspective, setting details, characterization of the main character Luke Sawyer, conflicts, dialogue, plot structure, writing style, and use of vivid language. Feedback is provided on each element, finding the story starts engagingly, features well-developed characters and realistic conflicts, advances the plot through natural dialogue, and uses descriptive language that shows rather than just tells.

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Writer: _______________Vihaan_______________ Editor: _My 22 year old cousin sister

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Flash Fiction Peer-Editing Worksheet

FIRST, read through your partner’s story COMPLETELY. After reading it through,
answer the following questions:

1. Hook: did the story start in medias res? Yes/No Did it start with action/dialog/thought? Was this
an effective beginning? Can you follow the ideas?

No, the story did not start in medias res. It began with a scene at the Dallas International Airport,
introducing characters and setting the stage. The beginning involved action and observation, making it
effective by arousing curiosity and engaging the reader.

2. Does the narrator have a “voice”? What is the narrative perspective? Is it effective for this story?
Why?
Yes, the narrator has a distinct voice in the story. The narrative perspective is third-person limited,
mainly following the perspective of Luke Sawyer. This perspective is effective for the story as it allows
the reader to connect with Luke's observations, thoughts, and experiences, creating a more personal and
engaging narrative. The limited perspective also adds a layer of mystery and curiosity regarding
Karthik's story, enhancing the overall effectiveness of the storytelling.

3. Write 2 details that show what the setting was. Does the story show overall setting and specific
setting? (zoomed out/zoomed in?)

The overall setting of the story is in the bustling Dallas International Airport. This serves as the
backdrop for the initial scene where Luke observes the emotional embrace between Karthik and the
elderly woman. The specific setting is near Terminal B35 within the airport, adding a localized detail
that zooms in on the precise location where the interaction takes place. The narrative provides a
combination of both zoomed-out (overall airport) and zoomed-in (specific terminal) details to ground
the reader in the story's environment.

4. Characterization: list 3 details that show you one of the characters. Circle direct or indirect. Is this
character well-developed?

Character: Luke Sawyer

Direct: Luke Sawyer is described as a Texan cowboy.


Indirect: Luke's curiosity about the emotional scene and his offer to help with Farida's dream reveal his
compassionate and helpful nature.
Indirect: Luke's acknowledgment of the shared connection with Karthik and his active involvement in
turning Farida's dream into reality demonstrates his empathy and willingness to make a positive
impact.
Overall Assessment: The character of Luke Sawyer is reasonably well-developed. The combination of
direct and indirect details provides insights into his personality, motivations, and actions, allowing the
reader to form a rounded understanding of who he is.

5. What type of conflict is in this story? Describe the conflict? Does it seem realistic for the story?

Type of Conflict: Character vs. Self and Character vs. Circumstances

Description of Conflict:
Character vs. Self: Karthik experiences an internal conflict related to the recent loss of his half-sister,
Farida, and the emotional impact it has on him. This inner struggle is evident in his unexpected display
of emotions at the airport and his subsequent determination to fulfill Farida's dream.

Character vs. Circumstances: Both Luke and Karthik face the external conflict of bringing Farida's
dream to fruition despite the challenges presented by the geographical and cultural differences between
Chennai and Dallas. The need to bridge these gaps and create a meaningful connection becomes a
central conflict in the story.

Realism of the Conflict:


The conflicts in the story seem realistic and relatable. The internal conflict faced by Karthik reflects the
emotional challenges that often accompany loss, while the external conflict involving the project to
connect two distant cities adds a layer of realism by addressing practical and cultural obstacles. The
blend of personal and external struggles contributes to a well-rounded narrative.

6. Dialogue: Does this story include at least 2 lines of descriptive dialog? Does it sound natural? What
does it add to the story? (eg. Develops a character, advances the plot, etc.)
Yes, the story includes several lines of descriptive dialogue. The dialogue sounds natural and serves
multiple purposes within the story:

Character Development: The dialogue helps to develop the characters of Luke and Karthik. Through
their conversation, we get insights into their personalities, emotions, and motivations.

Plot Advancement: The conversation between Luke and Karthik drives the plot forward. It reveals the
reason behind Karthik's emotional state, introduces Farida's dream, and sets the stage for their
collaboration to honor her legacy.

Emotional Impact: The dialogue adds an emotional layer to the story. The exchange between Luke and
Karthik allows the reader to empathize with the pain of loss and the shared commitment to turning
Farida's dream into reality.

Connection and Theme Reinforcement: The dialogue reinforces the theme of connection, not only
between characters but also between different cultures and dreams. It underscores the idea that Farida's
dream is now a bridge connecting hearts across oceans and cultures.

Overall, the dialogue contributes significantly to character development, plot advancement, and
emotional resonance in the story.

7. Does the story have a strong, interesting plot? Is it new or does it feel cliched? Point out anything
that confuses you. Draw, then write details into the Freytag’s Pyramid:

The story has a strong and interesting plot that revolves around the discovery of a deep and meaningful
dream, the shared commitment to realizing that dream, and the eventual achievement of a
transformative connection between two cities.

Exposition:

Setting: Dallas International Airport.


Introduction of Luke Sawyer, a Texan cowboy, observing a poignant scene involving Karthik and an
elderly woman.
Hint of mystery as Luke wonders about the untold story behind Karthik's tears.
Inciting Incident:
Luke finds himself sitting next to Karthik on the flight, creating an opportunity for their connection to
develop.
Luke acknowledges their shared encounter in the airport, sparking the revelation of Karthik's recent
loss and Farida's dream.
Rising Action:
Karthik shares Farida's dream of connecting Chennai and Dallas through a series of murals.
Luke expresses empathy and offers to help make Farida's dream a reality.
The Heritage Connection event is introduced as the means to showcase Indian and Texan traditions.
Climax:
The first Heritage Connection event takes place, showcasing the cultural heritage of Chennai and
Dallas.
A permanent art installation symbolizing the bond between the cities is unveiled.
Falling Action:
Luke and Karthik exchange a glance, acknowledging their shared accomplishment and the enduring
legacy created in honor of Farida.
Resolution:

Karthik reflects on Farida's legacy.

8. Writing style: does the writer use vivid words and language to make the story come alive to you? Is
the sentence structure varied? Check for telling and showing.

Write out one-two good “showing sentences”:

"As Luke boarded the flight, to his amazement, he was sitting next to the same man that he had seen
embracing the elderly woman in the terminal."

This sentence not only tells us about Luke's surprise but also shows the reader the unexpected
connection between Luke and Karthik, creating a sense of intrigue and anticipation.

Write out the sentence which has an appositive:

Karthik, a stoic tech executive, and unexpectedly emotional, was tearfully embraced an
elderly woman, leaving Luke intrigued about the untold story behind the tears.

Suggestions:

Add more notes below if you need to continue from the front. Number them.

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