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Lesson 11 - Proof Reading

A man is alone in a dark, dusty room with boarded up windows. He hears strange noises and hides behind a piano. Whatever is making the sounds finds him, opens the piano lid, and plays a sad song before revealing a pair of yellow eyes, making it clear the presence is inhuman.

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Lesson 11 - Proof Reading

A man is alone in a dark, dusty room with boarded up windows. He hears strange noises and hides behind a piano. Whatever is making the sounds finds him, opens the piano lid, and plays a sad song before revealing a pair of yellow eyes, making it clear the presence is inhuman.

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The door slammed behind Me. I was alone in the room. Or was i. The room was
quite dark and there was a lot of dust in the air. It was cold too, like there was a
gohst in the room I walked towards the window hoping to find that i could let some
light in. I found them borded up meaning I would have to stay in the darkness. Oh
no, I muttered to myself.
I heard sumthing move behind me. It didnt sound human although it may have just
been that my nerves were on edge. I panicked desperately looking around the room
for somewhere to hide I guessed the sound came from near the door so i ran to the
oppasite side of the room. I hidd behind the larjest object I could find, a piano. As I
hid, I could feel the cold wall behind my back. I was shivering loads. the sound
moved towards me, really slowly and it sounded like slithering. I was really scared.
The sound moved closur but then it stopped. I heard a creak as the lid of the piano
was opened followed by the sound of the keys being stroked. Then watever it was
started playing a slow sad song before suddenly stopping. Then I heard it move
again. I was so scared I almost stoped breathing. Then i looked up and a pair of
yellow eyes was watching me. I knew then it wasnt human.

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Task 1 Find all the corrections that need to be made in the piece of writing
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what the correction should be.
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varying sentence length and complexity, interesting adjectives/adverbs, a
variety of punctuation etc.
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