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Essay Prompt: The importance of arts and music in the education process
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INTRODUCTION
I. Thesis (which clearly states one specific assertion): Nowadays, the education had changed a lot. People believe that the
most important thing is the money, that is why they focus on subjects like science, math, sports; because the society explain
us how much a scientific, an architecture or a doctor earn. But what about all the possibilities that study art and music can
give us. A lot of people never got the chance to enjoy this kind of classes because some schools think that study something
related with art is a waste of time. However, I think that art and music need to be learned in the school because those lessons
bring hundreds of benefits to a child.
BODY
I. Body Paragraph 1
A. Topic Sentence #1 (specific claim that directly proves apart of your thesis and focuses this paragraph on one idea): First,
growing up in a musical environment is often advantageous for children language development.
1. Sub-point A1 (Reason - one specific aspect that further explains T.S.): The effects of music education on the kids can be
seen in the brain. The development of language and other facts over time tends to enhance parts of the brain that helps on
education process.
a. Specific evidence (to back up the reason): As we know our brain is dividing in two hemispheres. One of those is
for motor skills and creativity and the other one is for logical-mathematical intelligence. When you are a musician
your brain must work harder. The children who learn how to play a musical instrument have larger growth of neural
activity than people not in music training. That’s because the brain must be attentive of all things that are around.
That’s the same with dancers. A dancer must deal with the space, with his/her partners, also must be attentive with
all the possible situations that can happened at the performance.
b. Commentary (explain the connection between the evidence and reason): Art is part of culture and the brain is built
on a genetic basis and a cultural part, which begins to develop since one is born. Theatre, dance, painting help in the
development of meaningful thinking.
2. Sub-point A2 (Reason - one specific aspect that further explains T.S.): Through art, the development of the brain is
stimulated.
a. Specific evidence (to back up the reason): Philosophy says that the body is spirit, mind and brain, the
body is the prolongation of the brain. If one educates the body in every way, it is also educating the brain.
b. Commentary (explain the connection between the evidence and reason): Talking and drawing allow to
build new languages, is what is known as meaningful thinking. Teachers have to keep doing that, but they
forget that they are also dads and that they should encourage their students.
3. Closing Sentence (tie the ideas in the paragraph together in one sentence and make clear that this claim
has proven your thesis): Dance, painting and body movement must be important in school.
B. Topic Sentence #2 (specific claim that directly proves apart of your thesis and focuses this paragraph on one
idea): Across the art it is possible to improve and to develop the creative skills that it already possesses or no
1. Sub-point B1 (Reason - one specific aspect that further explains T.S.): Kids around age three should include
drawing a circle and beginning to use safety scissors. Around age four, children may be able to draw a square and begin
cutting straight lines with scissors. Many preschool programs emphasize the use of scissors because it develops the dexterity
children will need for writing. Also, the dance is able to harmoniously combine in space a myriad of movements within a
musical time, which creates and orders the rhythms. Therefore, besides being considered an art, the dance is also an activity
that contributes integral benefits at any age, being especially beneficial in the children.
a. Specific evidence (to back up the reason): Leonardo da Vinci said: "Painting covers all the
functions of the eye, these are: darkness, light, body, color, shape, location, distance, closeness,
movement and repose."
b. Another point is that in all the movements that the child performs during the practice of any
type of dance, many spheres of his body are involved. In this way, the child develops his/her
motor skills (capacity to generate movements), his/her cognitive space (capacity to carry out
mental processes), his/her affective part (need to express emotions), and his/her social
environment (related with other children).
b. Commentary (explain the connection between the evidence and reason): Creating helps us learn
to look, because it makes us focus on details and pay more attention to our inner and outer world. The dance
gets the child to work and discover all their body segments
C. Topic Sentence #1 (specific claim that directly proves apart of your thesis and focuses this paragraph on one
idea): Art reduces stress
1. Sub-point C1 (Reason - one specific aspect that further explains T.S.): Painting, drawing, shaping, cutting,
pasting, are activities that help the body and the mind to relax.
a. Specific evidence (to back up the reason): Making art leads you to immerse yourself in your creative process
with the goal you have in mind about what you want to achieve. This reduces stress levels and generally
increases well-being. Also, many medical professionals prescribe to listen to music to people who suffer from
stress and anxiety. In addition, the music helps to generate endorphins, the hormone of happiness.
Any physical activity, therapeutic dance; it becomes an activity that benefits the people who practice it.
Among the work options for a practical class are: body language, dance, relaxation techniques, contact therapy,
music therapy, meditation, yoga and visualization techniques, awareness methods, body recognition and
recreational dance.
In a one-hour session, different factors of distraction, relaxation and to achieve the desired objective are combined,
such as releasing tension, improving body awareness and maintaining a good state of health based on the principles of health
training.
b. Commentary (explain the connection between the evidence and reason): Stress and each one of
the affections that this produces can be intervened through dance, because the techniques applied in a
session can generate changes in the way people face stress situations. Music also improves the development
of the brain area involved in motivation, pleasure and reward.
3. Closing Sentence (tie the ideas in the paragraph together in one sentence and make clear that this claim
has proven your thesis): as you can see all this kind of activities helps to the students to learn better, create
a good space for them, they can explore their minds and to know what they are capable of. As soon as they
finish all the other subjects they can find a peaceful place and create wherever they want.
CONCLUSION
A. Main idea (restated in different words than in thesis): In summary, The creative spirit of the students needs to
be reinforced, and it is the teacher who must promote the environmental conditions that allow the artistic experience to
become interesting. Art can not try to compete with academic subjects, art must maintain its integrity and remain basically
human, it must be the place to which the young student directs his eyes, without the worry that his work will be evaluated,
nor the sensation of that he has to act according to the canons of others. Art provides the opportunity to evolve and progress
through paths that are not allowed in other subjects or subjects. Art can provide the stimulus for constructive action and the
opportunity for each individual to see himself or herself as an acceptable being. The essential element in the artistic program
is the student, and artistic education plays a vital role in its development.
