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Nominator: LarstonMarston (talk · contribs) 02:16, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Matthew Yeager (talk · contribs) 19:52, 1 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]


GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Great article! I'm looking for your feedback on two topics: 1) refreshing some of the close paraphrasing in the biography section, and 2) how to best show off local notability within St. Louis. Let me know how you might want to move forward. If you have some ideas, I think we can complete this review shortly.

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
    Hopefully as more information is added through their vast musical career, the section which lists date after date (1965, 1967, 1969, 1972, 1999) can move to flow more prose-like. No change requested today.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.
    a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
Please take a look at some close paraphrasing that may be occurring in the first paragraph of the biography section. Here are some examples that of areas that could use a refresh:
  • Article: Trevor was born and raised in Harlem, near the edge of its Hispanic quarter.[1][a] Her father was a singer and guitarist originally from Richmond, Virginia. She was exposed to a wide variety of music through the Apollo Theater
  • Source: Harlem is where Trevor was born and raised. She was exposed to a variety of music and got to hear many of the country's foremost jazz and pop performers live at Harlem's venerable Apollo Theater.
  • Article: Her first professional singing engagements were in San Francisco and Los Angeles.
  • Source: Trevor got her first professional singing engagements in LA and San Francisco
  • Reference 2 seems to have mistyped, here is what works for me (removing "on" in the link): https://search.worldcat.org/title/on1086091902
  • Reference 5 & 13, STLToday, and Reference 9 BizJournal - requires subscription to view. Would you update cite web to include |url-access=subscription
  1. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    Focused on discography and career. Perhaps an opportunity to expand on the local notability aspect. If they are significant to the St. Louis area during the 1970s, then how can that be reflected in the article? I see that many lifetime awards were given in 2008-2010.
  2. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  3. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  4. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  5. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
Thank you for the feedback! I fixed the citation issues and close paraphrasing and added a sentence about her being described as a "giant" of the Gaslight Square era. LarstonMarston (talk) 20:57, 1 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I also specified that her performances in later life were mostly local. I'm not sure if there's anything else I can do to show local significance. LarstonMarston (talk) 21:05, 1 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
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