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Priming the Pump (Part III)

10 Jul

To get over the hurdle of getting to write, I’ve already talked about using this blog or recording my audiobook to get over the initial fear of the blank page. However, the best system I’ve been using to get the urge to write turned out to be the part of writing I hate the most.

“Writing is re-writing” is a slogan I put on my computer when I was editing my first novel back in the nineties. I remember that big vacuum-tube monitor on my grandparents’ kitchen nook where I set up my computer to write. (I was in college, my grandparents were in Texas for the summer, I got to use the house.) I had already written 500 single-spaced pages of a novel that turned out never to see the light of day. Mostly because it was crap, partly because it was rejected by publishers, and now, because it’s hopelessly out of date. This was a different obstacle; going back through what I thought came out perfect the first time and saying “How do I make this better?”

What I needed was someone else to read what I wrote and make some suggestions on how to improve it. What I thought I had was a co-author; I printed and mailed him copies of my first drafts, and since his name was going to be on the page, I thought that would make him incentivized to actually work on it. However, when he dropped out of college, we didn’t have that daily connection to work on the story, and between being depressed, working, and physically distant, he never wrote one damned word afterwards.

I keep telling myself I forgave him for that, but then I keep bringing up this story, so… have I?

This has led to a long tradition of my friends saying they’d read something of mine and then blowing me off. And yeah, that hurts. Especially when I need an editor that I can’t afford to publish books no one reads. Thankfully, technology has come to save me. The much maligned AI chatbots, which will probably kill so many careers, has already started to kill my brother-in-law’s career as an editor. (I can’t afford him either.) He also is physically in another state and it takes time for him to read and make suggestions. AI can do it in 15 seconds.

I actually use two chatbots to do my initial editing with. I used to use Microsoft Copilot for initial run through, but even though it has the “conversation” that I’ve written my current trilogy in throughout, it doesn’t check further back than… oh, a couple weeks of transcripts? And I understand – this is a free service and there’s a limit to how much processing power it will provide me. However, I discovered Google Gemini does go back through the whole conversation and does a better job of line-level editing for me.

For the second draft, I run it through Claude. This chatbot is amazing, it does everything I want it to, and it does it well. If I want it to crank out extensive fan-fic histories combining the Act of Union in 1707 with the rise of the Ministry of Magic (they are connected, my friends!), it writes a compelling essay on the subject. But man, are they stingy with their processing time. If you’re trying to type during the work day (whistling nervously), then I get one chapter edit before it locks me out for five hours. If I wanted to spend $20 to $100/month, I’d hire my brother!

However, having that immediate feedback on my writing, really inspires me to write more. If I start the day with having the chatbots going back over what I wrote the previous day, that really gets me going to keep writing. Now, do I always take their advice? No. However, sometimes it comes up with better ways to write lines than I ever used. So my story is… 5% written by AI, but if I wanted it to write the story instead, that would kill the fun I’m having! And personally, I think it comes out better.

If you’re curious what an AI edited, human written original piece looks like, check out No Such Wizard, my recent novel. If you’re a dedicated Kindle user like I am, it’s only $0.99. Check it out. If you’re a cheapskate like me, I still want you to read it, but you can check it out on An Archive of Our Own (AO3) with simpler formatting, but the words are all the same. Enjoy!

Could You Change “Submit” to “Complete?”

25 Jun

The video is done, the training project is complete, and you’re glad because the three-month project is finally done. The endless “can you get back to me?” emails have passed, the client is happy with the project, and we’ve published. Then you get an email saying, “Hey, I noticed at 8:57 that you say “click submit in the top center” when it should be “click complete at the top right. Can we fix that?”

Now I’ll admit, I’m not a detail-oriented person, I’m a big picture guy. And thank God those people exist. We need them to handle… accounting, medicine, things that require attention to detail. This training is about how to “click here, click there, and click this” on an online system to help someone get benefits through the company. My client never asked themselves, “Is anyone going to be confused by the fact that the Submit button is now called Complete and in a slightly different place?” No, they just saw that it was wrong.

In their defense, they realized that I did the voice-over exactly as they wrote it, and they admitted that the mistake was theirs. Does it take that long to fix the mistake? No, five minutes on my editing software, five minutes plugging it my authoring software, and then fifty minutes for the authoring software to process that back into a new video. Meanwhile, I can fix the error that Amazon keeps finding in my paperback version of No Such Wizard, and get around to my blog post for the day.

What I object to is that this is a perpetual motion machine. There will always be errors if you look hard enough. There will always be something to fix, and if you wait long enough, the information will be out of date and you have to update everything all over again. I went through this with another client when she realized she accidentally said “$869” instead of “$863” in a training. Now, in terms of details, this affected how much money she said was going into someone’s paycheck, which you would think be more important. But it’s a difference of six dollars. She held up the entire project for a week so she could re-record five seconds worth of voice over.

What did she think was going to happen? Packs of firefighters banging on the (locked) door, furious, axe handles in hand, screaming “Give me MY MONEY!?” At some point, my clients need to ask the question, “Does this change really impact things enough that I need to stop the entire process?” But as I type this, maybe the answer is even more insidious. For her, the training is the lowest priority in her to-do list; it may not matter to her that they hold up the publishing for a week because frankly, “It can wait.” The fact that the training is the highest priority in my list doesn’t matter.

Now thankfully, I work in an environment where I don’t have stress… or it happens maybe twice in five years of working here. The upside to being everyone’s lowest priority is that no one really cares when they the finished project. Which gives me plenty of time to pursue other things, like my second Master’s degree in Geography (graduated December 2025), or now, the first novels I have written in years. At the same time, I have the nagging fear that, “If they don’t care if my work is done, do they care enough to still employ me?” So far, the answer is yes, and as long as I turn things around (when I get them) within a day, I’m listed as a miracle-worker. I’m the hardest working man on the floor and I get tons of kudos… when in reality, I’m able to turn around things so fast because I have so little to do.

If you wanna see what I actually do with my time at work, pick up No Such Wizard, my recent novel. If you’re a dedicated Kindle user like I am, it’s only $0.99. Check it out. If you’re a cheapskate like me, I still want you to read it, but you can check it out on An Archive of Our Own (AO3) with simpler formatting, but the words are all the same. Enjoy!

Dropping Out of the Zone

16 Jun

I’ve been the writing “zone” for over a month. I couldn’t wait to get back to my story! I was cranking out a thousand to three thousands words a day, it’s been awesome. I have never been on a streak like this before. And then, the moment passes, and my creative streak has ended.

It’s been a good run; 80,000 words is no small achievement. Completely finished one novel, mostly finished with the sequel, and then poof! Suddenly, I fall out of the writing zone, and I see the sign, “Welcome back to the grind.”

My first thought was, “Well, you just don’t like writing the combat scenes,” which I wrote about yesterday. I’m approaching the climax of the story, so there’s going to be the inevitable face-off between good and evil. Can’t talk your way out of this one, Jack. 🙂 I managed to write the first combat scene, but even that came out… a little flatter than I had hoped. So I had to ask myself, has the moment passed? And as I thought about it, I realized, “Yeah.”

I just wish it had lasted a little bit longer… like so I could finish the novel I’m working on. 10,000 words to go, man! Just a little bit longer. Instead, you’re stuck in Grindville. Now, I could bother you with the normal platitudes: “Writing is rewriting.” “Inspiration gets you started, it’s not what keeps you going.” I’m familiar with the “writer’s high.” When I finished my first novel, Manifest Destiny (don’t bother googling it, it’s never been published), I wrote another 10,000 words of another novel. And then the high stopped.

However, that was over 25 years ago. Since then, I’ve written ten (or more) books, participated in lots of NaNoWriMos, and cranked out endless blogs. Most importantly, I’ve gone through grad school… twice. Nothing will prepare you better as a writer, regardless of what you’re studying, than having to crank out endless pages on the drop of a hat. Thirty pages a week, no problem. 500 words? Don’t make me laugh. So I’m a long time resident of Grindville. You don’t need inspiration to do your work, but man, does it really help getting the desire.

Now this is a purely creative project; no one’s clamoring for it, no one’s demanding I finish the story. I could just stop writing now. But I want to complete it; I may have lost my inspiration, but I haven’t lost the joy of writing. It’s the only project in my life that’s more than the just the everyday demands of work and home. Writing on this blog helps me prep for getting back into the novel. The process brings me joy.

So all I need to do now is push past the difficult to get to the conclusion. I’ll make it, but it just won’t be as fast, but I can only hope that the final product is satisfying and delicious. If you’re curious what a wave of inspiration looks like, read No Such Wizard, my recent novel. If you’re a dedicated Kindle user like I am, it’s only $0.99. Check it out. If you’re a cheapskate like me, I still want you to read it, but you can check it out on An Archive of Our Own (AO3) with simpler formatting, but the words are all the same. Enjoy.

“This is a really great book.”

16 Feb

Reading a really good book is a wonderful opening into someone else’s world. It can refresh you after reading mediocre… or just plain bad books. However, it can also be terribly disheartening when trying to write your own.

Not that quality has anything to do with success; but it helps. I try to reassure myself that if really bad books can somehow make it to be published, sometimes hitting the best seller lists, then my decently written books can also be read and enjoyed.

So recently, I’ve finished reading “The Windup Girl by Paolo Bacigalupi (“bag of galoshes”) and was bowled away by it. First off, because it was set in post-apocolyptic Bangkok, which appealed to me greatly since I lived there for a year. However, second, it was the perfect mix of steampunk and cyberpunk which fit beautifully together. It was also a great choice, because even though it was written ten years ago, it’s setting of a world ravaged by genetically engineered diseases and climate change didn’t seem too far fetched. The characters were wonderful, nuanced, and blended well together to tell the whole story of a Thailand in trouble.

However, it also had another side effect. It made me completely stop wanting to write my own story. Of course, I wasn’t that motivated to outline it as of late, but having my own story set after the warming seemed rather trite after reading the major award winning book. What kind of story could I tell that could compare with that?!

So I feel like I need a better story idea–and after reading Leviathan Wakes, I’m realizing that my merchant marine in space story is kinda weak tea as well. Thankfully, I already knew that was whale puke, so that’ll have to sit in the electronic desk drawer for a little longer.

But what do you think? Have you read something so good that it’s turned you off to working on your own stories? Let me know in the comments below!

Saving Mr. Crooked Nose

8 Feb

Last July, I worked on and finished a novel. The problem is on August 1st, I realized that when it was done, it was whale puke. How do I save this story and make it salvageable?

How this situation came about was that I decided to focus harder on my writing. I’ve found that doing NaNoWriMo is the most effective way to ensure that I actually get a novel done. So since I was starting in June, I enrolled into the Camp NaNoWriMo program so I do it into the summer instead of November.

So this was the “merchant ships in SPACE!” story that I named my fan club after. I thought this would be really fun – I did a lot of research into what merchant marines do today – and I managed to write 57k words of the novel and finished it on time! However, I realized within a couple thousand words of the end that… it sucked.

However, I don’t want this story to go to waste. The story of Cameron Crooked Nose (yes, that’s the main character – the naming conventions of this world is a little tricky) I know that part of the problem is that I tried doing the “flashback.” Problem: I really didn’t know where I was going with the story, so I didn’t really know where he’d been. Which is the primary problem – there was no plot!

You think I would have figured that one out, but I was so enamored with the setting that I just ran with it… and didn’t think about what story would actually be told. Whoops. Well, now I have a chance to fix all that.

Now that I’ve had enough time to think about it, I feel more confident that I can tackle this problem without beating myself up too much. Have you run into this before? Love a concept so much that you completely miss the flaws? Let me know in the comments below!

Making you Book Text Look Professional

14 Jan

Today’s blog post is brought to you by frequent contributor Editor Ed, a small press publisher, author, and my dear friend. You can read his latest short story compilation, Sorcery Against Caesar, in the Amazon store.

Why Is Looking Professional Important? Because the Gatekeepers are gone, and readers know it. In the days before self-publishing, only big publishing companies could afford to print books. That meant every novel in the bookstore has been vetted by experienced editors, formatted properly by industry professionals, and met at least minimum standards of quality.

Those days are gone, and there are no quality controls on the books found online anymore. The unpleasant truth is that Amazon today is full of terrible self-published novels that twenty years ago would never have made it past the slush pile at a big publishing company.

Readers know this, and don’t want to risk spending money on an awful book (like this one Marcus reviewed). Consequently, they tend to shy away from self-published novels, automatically assuming—fairly or unfairly—that they’re badly written. After all, if it’s really a good book (so the thinking goes), it would have been picked up by a real publishing company… right?

The self-published author’s saving grace, however, is that readers don’t really know if “Excelsior Press” is a legitimate-but-obscure indie publisher with an office and a dozen employees, or an amateur high school student with a laptop. I suspect most shoppers assume it’s a professional small press unless you give them a reason not to—and that’s where looking professional comes in.

If your paperback looks amateurish, you risk losing sales. Although readers may not be able to consciously identify what exactly makes the text look professional, they’ll know when it just looks wrong.

So here are four tips on how to make your paperback interior look as professional as possible. They may sound obvious, but I’ve seen various amateur self-publishers make each of these mistakes.

Include Front Matter

Front matter is the stuff in tiny print at the beginning of the book that people rarely read—but will notice its absence, since it’s a clue the book isn’t professionally formatted. At the very least, include the following information at the bottom of your title page:

  • A Copyright Notice in this format: “Copyright © YEAR by YOUR NAME”
  • A similar Copyright Notice for any cover art or interior art, if a different person from above
  • The ISBN number (or, if you don’t have one, the assigned ASIN (Amazon), Google ID, etc.)
  • The name and city of the publisher in this format: “Publisher Name, City, State, Country”

Use a Serif Font

Nothing screams “amateur” like a novel printed in non-standard fonts like Comic Sans, Handwriting, or Gothic fonts. Professionally published fiction almost always uses a serif font like Times New Roman, Georgia, Baskerville, or Garamond (Amazon’s preferred font). So unless you’re doing Kindle/ePub versions only, use a Serif font.

Single-Space Your Text

The body text in professionally published fiction is almost always single-spaced. Double-spaced or even 1.5-spaced text is a red flag to readers that the novel was self-published by an amateur.

Indent Paragraphs

Professionally published fiction indents the first line of each paragraph, and doesn’t have a blank line between paragraphs. Text on the intent, however, usually doesn’t indent paragraph, preferring to separate them by a blank line instead (like this blog post). When the text in a novel is formatted this way, though, it’s another sign the book was self-published, and thus might scare readers away.

Only Use One Space Between Sentences

While two spaces is becoming more common and acceptable, especially in internet content like blogs and social media, the publishing industry still uses only one space between sentences.

There’s a LOT more I could say about presenting your book text in a professional-looking way. For example, there are some guidelines that apply only to paperbacks and not ebooks (and vice versa!), but I’ve run out of space. If you found this useful, say so in the comments. If I forgot something you think it’s important, let me know in the comments as well!

The God of Continuity

28 Dec

Plot holes can go undetected for years or covered up rather clumsily. They can throw your audience out of the moment and you may never get them back. So how do you avoid that problem?

The easy answer? Get someone to read your story before you publish it. There are so many things that can be caught by having a fresh pair of eyes. For example, in my most recent book, Drag’n Drop, I thought I’d throw in something really cool for the villain to say: “And then I will become the singer and not the song.” To which my friend, “What on Earth does that mean?” Whoops–not everyone got it. So I actually included my friend’s quote in my hero’s response, which allowed my villain to explain what the heck he meant.

In my old writing circle, all of us had one superpower that helped out the rest of us. For example, one of my friends was the Technobabble God. He was more interested in science than the rest of us, so if you had trouble with a particular technology that you were trying to make sound believable, he could give you a line of BS that sounded good, and you put that in your story.

I was the God of Continuity; I found your plot hole and ensured that whatever wacky #*$&@($ idea that you got in your head to put your story that somehow, someway, it would makes sense as part of your plot. You happen to use a digital gate in your story, because you just read Piers Anthony, and thought that turning a ship into an energy signal, and then rebuilding it on the other side was a cool idea. And it is… except that you’ve already established that we use hyperspace gates. So… why another method of travel?

The answer–the digital gates were an experiment by the government to improve space travel. However, they were so expensive that they could only be used on one established route. Duh-da! Your prayers have been answered, writer!

For my father-in-law, he built a world where the colonists had been medieval reenactors who wanted to get away from the modern world. It happened to be a world where psychic powers could be mistaken for magic. So when you run into a ghost of one of the original colonists, and he sees this computer, he didn’t know what it was. Except he should have–and one of his fans pointed this out. So in the prequel, he had to put in a bit about erasing their memories, so that the original colonists wouldn’t be having second thoughts about leaving. Plot hole closed.

If a friend won’t read your book, then it helps to wait a while between finishing your story and publication, then come back and read it again. Sometimes, just giving yourself time to breathe between finishing the first/second/fifth draft and getting it ready for print that you can realize, “Oh, Sancho Panza disappeared for two chapters!”

Is there an easier way to detect (and close) plot holes? Do you have an army of beta readers who can figure these things out? Can you lend them to me? 🙂 Let me know in the comments below!

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